Human Nature Essay
Ever since the dawn of time humans have been born with the ability to be evil but not the ability to be good. There are those who are able to keep their hatred and evil under control. Some people even turn that into good. People like firefighters, police officers and soldiers. People who donate to charity and help eachother out.
There are those who let their evil run loose. According to http://www.prisonpolicy.org/reports/pie.html over 150,000 people are in jail for murder. And over 146,000 for assaulting someone. These people are the definition of evil. “Profoundly immoral and malevolent.” This is the definition of evil. And it fits these people. These people throw away their morals and don’t think. They attack people for no reason and end up killing them. There are people I didn’t mention who are locked up like people convicted for robbery, or burglary or even gun smuggling. These people do not care. This is the evil that is in them.
There are those who turn their evil into good. These people are the ones who protect against the evil in the world. For example poverty is one. People who fight against it like the Red Cross, who build houses. Or people who donate to poverty stricken people. The people like Police and Soldiers protect against evil overseas and on the homefront. Police even though some of them are evil, protect the good. They keep the evil from corrupting the good. They stop people from doing something that is evil as well. Soldiers protect people overseas from the evil over there corrupting them.
This is like in The Lord Of The Flies. In the book there is a good power and and evil power. The good being Ralph’s group and the bad being Jack’s group. Ralph tried his best to keep people from going over to the evil and side and joining Jack, but just like in real life he couldn’t stop them. They ended up joining evil out of temptation and lust for survival. They ended up killing people to survive. This is how everyone is. In a situation of survival people will do anything to survive, steal, and even kill to survive. This also relates to Night. People were killing for food. And even stealing food from their dying relatives and murdering young boys and old men just so that they could survive.
People have always been like this. Trying to do anything to further things. This is the evil we are all born with. There is no denying this. Humans are evil.
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ReplyDeleteyour introduction is very good and i like how you include the "since the dawn of time..." and it gives the introduction a nice feel. your detail was good though it could have been better. your text evidence was very good with how you included numbers from real life studies and your evidence from LOTF with how you talked about how jack was the bad in human nature and ralph was the good. I like how you argued the evil side of human nature as the main factor because not a lot of people would and having your own opinion is a good part of being a writer. your grammar could have been a lot better. remember next time you write to read over and remove or add punctuation where it is or is'nt needed. your topic sentences went very well with your essay as well did your paragraph format.
ReplyDeleteyour overall essay was very good and the only place i really noticed that could use some help was your grammar and your detail other than that your essay was good!
This paper is really interesting and it hits every point an argument should hit, but you shouldn't wait until the end to tell the reader what side you are on. You should choose your side, or create a "Thesis Statement" at the end of your awesome introduction paragraph. The flow was great, I even like how you brought the counterargument into the picture as well. You did have some silly grammar mistakes like run-on sentences because you didn't put a comma. Try to find other words besides 'And" to start a sentence also. Either use a comma or replace 'And" with a different word that fits. Other than that your paper had a good flow, juicy details, and everything needed to support your claim. Good Job Parker!
ReplyDeleteI liked your introduction, but agree with Kashiem; you need to make it clear in the opening what side you are on. If you had done that, the paragraph about people turning their evil into good would have made more sense. I would also have considered putting the Lord of the Flies example first, because it would have supported the fact that people might want to turn their evil into good, but usually can't. Grade: 82%
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